SLUGFly's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Blind - part 1]

not so bad

the previous review was a bit harsh...

some very important advice for you:

1-watch your flash before submitting it... look for places where text is cut off or not readable

2-make voices... even bad voices are better than no sound at all

3-expand the story and characters more

4-stop writing "1" in subtitles... use "one" instead.

5-for the love of god, get away from the anime, the stuff dilutes creativity and finally kills it in favor of "excellence of reproduction" I'm not referring to your drawing style so much as I am the poorly written story, the Japanese names (you're not japanese) and especially the use of Japanese in the movie... Sensei is teacher, say teacher instead... saying sensei is trying to be "cool" like anime and it just won't work. Katana works for katana because it's a type of sword (also sai, shuriken, etc) but sensei is just a normal word that means teacher...

6- (part of #5) read short stories and/or novels... devour them... be better than them

Slein1 responds:

thank u for this commment, it's helpful a lot better then the last ONE.;p
About the text cut-off, Ireally don't kno how to fix it, It fits when Im in flash, but when checking the movie it's cut off, I make it smaller, same problem. :S
About using sensei, I've done karate in the Netherlands and we had to call our 'teacher', sensei and so I'll keep doing that and I don't think it's wrong.
Ill go further into the story in part 2, as planned.

[Archive: Drug Street 1-1]

nice job

very good, looking forward to episode 2:

graphics - work on your characters. All of your settings are pretty nice though, also, don't tween when someone turns around just flip the picture in 2 frames instead, it'll look nicer.

style - I have to side with the last reviewer on this. Poop and farts on their own are never funny. Although I did like the whole playout of him not being able to poop and being sent to the doctor... but don't focus on it for your next flashes. Humor is all about context and breaking context.

sound - the intro was horrid, but your voice acting was all great!

violence/interactivity - n/a

humor - the blue guy was pretty funny, and the interplay between the characters was pretty funny. I think it might be better though to make the gags shorter (set it up as fast or slow as you like, but do a quick knock down then move on).

overall - as the previous reviewer said, I can tell that you're quite young, maybe 13-16. If you're over 16 you really have to work a lot harder. If you're under 13 you're a prodigy... if I guessed your age right then you're on the right path and I look forward to seeing drug-street pt. 2 :)

Drumunit responds:

Thnaks for all the tips! You guessed the right age too!

[Afterliving]

excellent work of art

Most of the people on Newgrounds (I'm assuming) are rather young... I'm 30, starting to turn gray and this film made me think of a lot of things... it made me wonder how old I'll be when my own children turn twenty, made me realize that I don't have much time left to start my family. It made me wonder how long my father has left...

I'm not afraid of dieing, but the war is never scary when it's in another country is it? Your flash is a work of art, and I think that (if anyone) the only people that won't be deeply affected by this piece are those who are young enough that death is still just something in movies and retarded stick flashes. I'm impressed. I don't want to give an actual criticism, for this I'm sorry. There are 3 high goals to every art piece, technique, emotion and meaning. I feel that to point out technical things with this would demean the abundant emotion, so I refrain from doing so. Although I can say that I'm happy there was no ideology or theology present, this too would have demeaned and belittled the emotion.

Excellent work! This deserves the front page far more than most that get the honor.

soccerlord8 responds:

Thanks for the review. There are some technical issues--I know this could be more refined...it was mostly based on the fact that I just wanted to get the piece out inbetween my work so I suppose more time could have gone into it. But I'm glad to see you aren't a stick man fan.

[Winchester 9/11 Tribute]

not bad

actually it was pretty damn good for a clock movie. I was a bit disturbed to see someone riding THREE flash bandwagons all in one flash, but it's a pretty good point you made. And I loved the dancing water drop as New Orleans gets flooded.

WinchesterLock responds:

heh, thanks, although it is actually a Lock movie ;P

and if Water's ego keeps swelling the whole world will flood :(

[Foamy in "Internet Date"]

:/

It seems that Foamy has earned a true place in our pantheon of heros... Despite many Foamy anti-fans making parodies of him, he's starting to gather as much "fan-flashes" as an anime or game might have... kudos to our favorite squirrel... as the below guy said, this could have been done with any character... could have been done with a log. Might have been funnier actually, a log setting up a date by MSN.

As for the flash itself... kind of lame and predictable, but it was cool that you gave a subtle tip of the hat to knox... would have been nicer if it was in context though (the 50 ft. cock?)

Frankiedaman responds:

This is quite a half-half review. And no, a log setting up an internet date on MSN would just be odd =\

Glad you liked the movie posters, they could be coming to a cinema near YOU! *points*

[P.M.U.L ep.1]

nice piece

very beautiful, very sad...

I only have 1 criticism. I think it would have been better as a piece, and much much more emotional, if you had used the third person. I know (think) that this is meant to mirror your personal life and feelings, but something like this would have a more profound effect when told as "he" instead of "I" and "his" instead of "my".

good job, and awaiting episode two.

Porateku1 responds:

Thank You.